Part 2
This part’s a little rougher and a bit longer but I think I like where it’s going. If you like it please let me know!
If you have suggestions let me know, too, and if you want part 3 DEFINITELY let me know!
Day ran into day and chased each other into nights
As Cecil pored over his plans trying to get them right
A season passed into the next before the work was done
Then winter’s howling stalled his plans as dark clouds hid the sun.
Then one day when the sun dawned clear and blossoms broke the ice
Cecil grabbed the things he’d need and slipped past other mice
He found a little hill where he could practice taking flight
Pulled on wings, tested the breeze and leapt with all his might.
The mouse who dreamed of flight fell fast and hard back down
He spat out sod, then tried time and again to leave the ground
He crashed and fell and fell again, and though he never flew
He took his broken wings and worked to make them fly anew.
Then one fine day a strong wind blew and formed a cloudless sky
Cecil strapped on wings and jumped, and then he wondered why
He hadn’t crashed to earth then felt the strong breeze hold him fast
He sputtered, swooped, rose high again, and lived his dream at last.
Great work!! I’d love a part 3.
Such adorable imagery! I agree it would make a lovely children’s book. You’ve got my vote for a part 3! Oh and I’m by no means an English teacher, but I wonder if past should be passed instead. I always thought past was time and passed was location, but I could be wrong.