On both reads I did of this chapter, I really enjoyed how we go from something firmly grounded in reality (Waterloo) to the absurd. I love the concept of SLAYBIB and off-brand Pepe Le Pew!
And of course, it's exciting to see Joey breaking away. Can't help but cheer him on as he tries to work the time travel shenanigans out on his own. You said elsewhere you wanted to give him more agency here and you definitely made that happen, nice work!
I totally thought that was on purpose. 😂 Always fun when stuff like that sneaks in. In college I wrote a short story about two brothers named Harry and David and so much of my feedback included "oh, like the gift shop, right?" And all I could think was "what gift shop???"
I really like the concept that a time jump might include things you are thinking at that exact moment!
Thanks! I thought it could be fun to make it work like that- glad it paid off!
On both reads I did of this chapter, I really enjoyed how we go from something firmly grounded in reality (Waterloo) to the absurd. I love the concept of SLAYBIB and off-brand Pepe Le Pew!
And of course, it's exciting to see Joey breaking away. Can't help but cheer him on as he tries to work the time travel shenanigans out on his own. You said elsewhere you wanted to give him more agency here and you definitely made that happen, nice work!
Off-brand Pepe Le Pew is hilarious btw! I didn’t pick up on that in my own writing so it’s fun to have someone discover it-thank you!
I totally thought that was on purpose. 😂 Always fun when stuff like that sneaks in. In college I wrote a short story about two brothers named Harry and David and so much of my feedback included "oh, like the gift shop, right?" And all I could think was "what gift shop???"
Thank you Anthony! That means a lot.
You've got a knack for punchy prose. Great job!
Thank you!!
It’s a crazy multiverse out there for time/multiverse travelers. Go Joey!
Go Joey indeed!
Bravo! Well done. I like how you brought back some of the absurd bits from the early chapters. And I really can't wait to see what happens next!
Thank you! I just thought I’d take my own shot at emulating the great Douglas Adams. I’m glad I pulled it off.
I put a juicy teaser right across the plate so I’m looking forward to what happens next, too! No pressure Typewriter Mechanic! 😜
I have some thoughts, but you're going to have to read them next Thursday. Good job on this entry!
Thank you! Sounds like a plan, looking forward to your post next Thursday!
It was great. I love Douglas Adams, but I am no good at writing humor as a rule, at least not if I’m trying to write humor. :-)
Again, thank you I really appreciate it and I’m so glad you liked it!